学字四周，今年九岁．请指教

张灏

过几天就是爷爷生日了，准备了一份礼物，写的不好，请各位老师指教，以改正

秋山新雨

[whitepad]***700;400;700,400;;#f90;9; m49,52 l52,53,53,56,57,60,59,59,60,59,66,56,69,54,72,53,76,51,83,49,87,48,93,47,97,45,104,45,107,43,112,43,113,42,116,42 e|********* m64,68 l64,105,62,108,61,110,61,116,59,119,59,122,58,124,56,127,56,130,53,133,53,136,52,138,50,141,50,146,47,152,45,154,44,156,42,158,40,162,38,164 34,172,32,173,30,175,29,175,27,176,26,177,25,177 e|********* m58,112 l62,112,64,111,69,109,73,108,87,106,95,103,100,102,106,101,110,100,112,99,114,99,116,97,118,97,120,96,122,96,124,95,127,95,129,94,166,94 e|********* m81,129 l81,133,84,136,84,138,88,144,89,147,91,151,92,154,93,158,99,178,100,181,101,178,101,167,104,164,104,163,105,159,107,157,110,151,116,145,117,143,119,142 120,142,122,141,123,141,123,140,124,139,126,138,127,137,131,135,148,135,151,136,159,136,163,137,164,138,169,138,169,140,168,142,166,145,164,146,161,149,157,154 153,157,150,159,148,160,145,162,142,162,136,164,130,164,127,165,121,165,118,166,108,166,105,167,105,168,101,168,99,170,99,171,101,170,104,169,106,169,109,167 113,166,155,166,157,167,164,169,168,170,171,171,173,172,175,172 e|********* m228,49 l228,53,229,55,229,95,232,90,233,87,235,84,237,83,244,79,245,78,245,77,247,75,248,75,250,74,253,73,256,71,259,70,270,67,274,66,277,66,282,64 286,64,290,62,295,62,299,61,300,60,302,59,305,58,307,57,306,57,303,55,301,53,295,50,292,48,290,44,287,42,285,38,285,37 e|********* m268,22 l275,22,276,23,276,120,275,122,275,154,274,156,274,166 e|********* m254,112 l254,116,258,120,263,120,265,119,267,119,270,117,271,117,273,116,281,116,282,115,288,115,287,116,284,120,283,122,276,128,273,132,266,138,263,142,257,148,253,151 247,157,246,159,245,160,245,161,243,163,242,163,241,164,233,164,231,165,228,165,226,166,203,166,200,167,220,167,222,166,231,166,233,165,332,165,332,166,334,168 335,168,335,171,336,172,336,173,337,171 e|********* m349,67 l349,77,360,77,367,75,404,75,407,73,410,72,414,72,417,70,463,70 e|********* m381,101 l381,108,379,111,379,113,377,116,377,119,375,122,375,125,374,127,374,129,373,131,373,136,375,132,377,129,378,126,382,122,384,119,390,113,392,109,394,108,395,106 397,106,398,105,398,104,399,104,400,103,402,103,402,120,401,121,401,122,400,123,399,123,398,124,397,126,396,127,396,128,395,128,392,131,392,132,391,133,391,134 393,134,395,133,400,131,402,129,406,127,409,126,411,124,413,123,417,119,417,112,418,112,418,108 e|********* m428,90 l428,208,416,208,413,206,402,206,400,205,397,205,397,204,393,200,391,196,388,193,384,188,382,182 e|********* m518,47 l518,50,519,50,520,49,524,47,527,46,529,45,531,45,533,44,535,44,536,43,537,43,539,42,541,42,543,41,545,41,547,40,550,38,553,37,557,37,560,35 562,34,565,34,568,32,570,31,587,31 e|********* m546,8 l547,8,547,9,549,9,551,11,551,13,552,13,552,46,551,47,551,49,550,51,549,51,549,53,548,54,548,55,547,55 e|********* m531,61 l531,65,530,65,530,68,529,69,529,70,530,69,532,68,533,67,537,65,542,62,545,61,549,60,554,59,554,58,556,58,558,57,579,57 e|********* m534,87 l534,94,535,97,535,107,534,103,533,101,533,89,534,89,537,86,543,84,544,84,550,81,552,81,556,79,557,79,559,78,581,78,582,79,582,86,578,90,576,91 576,92,570,95,568,97,548,97,546,99,546,100,542,100,544,99,545,98,547,97,552,96,555,95,562,95,567,93,581,93,581,94,580,95,577,95 e|********* m474,136 l474,137,473,138,473,139,475,139,485,134,486,133,495,128,497,126,500,125,508,125,510,124,522,124,526,122,530,122,543,120,555,120,558,118,574,118,576,117,640,117 e|********* m544,106 l544,127,545,125 e|********* m599,96 l601,96,601,100,599,100,596,103,596,104,594,104,593,105,593,108,592,108,590,110,588,111,585,115,584,117,582,119,580,122,580,123,572,131,572,132,570,133,570,134 568,135,566,137,558,141,556,143,552,143,550,144 e|********* m522,145 l522,147,532,147,534,146,537,146,543,143,547,142,562,142,562,149,561,150,561,154,560,160,557,163,555,170,553,173,552,175,551,178,549,181,543,193,543,194,542,195 541,195,540,196,539,196,538,197,529,197,529,196,528,195,527,193,526,189,523,184,522,180,522,174 e|********* m553,132 l551,134,543,143,540,146,533,152,530,156,528,159,523,165,517,171,516,173,514,175,512,178,509,180,507,183,502,188,498,190,496,192,494,193,493,194,491,194,490,195 488,195,488,196,485,196,484,195,483,195,482,194,482,189 e|********* m569,156 l570,156,571,157,571,158,572,159,574,160,575,162,575,165,576,168,576,175,581,165,583,162,585,158,587,157,588,155,589,154,591,154,595,150,599,150,601,148,617,148 617,149,618,150,619,150,621,152,621,163,620,165,618,167,617,169,617,170,615,172,614,174,608,177,605,179,599,181,595,182,593,183,592,184,590,185,588,185,593,183 597,182,603,182,606,180,626,180 e[/whitepad]em1

长安佬

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可教之才!

经天

很有前途啊em2

张灏

谢谢大家，请大家指点不足．

为人民服务

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纪伟

写得好,继续努力!!

国旗飘扬

好好的写。。。会成功的。。em1 em1 em1